Author: Ellyn
Description: Adelynn never had thought that her life would
change forever after she found out that her mother was murdered.
Evil
pixies? Death mother? Specialist pixie-hunters with guns? It’s all in this
story about Adelynn, a high school girl whose mother suddenly dies by the hands
of a pixie one day. From that day on Adelynn gets taken in by a strange academy
that trains people to become pixie hunters. She has to give up her former life
in order to stay safe from the pixies and she trains to become a pixie hunter.
What do
I think about it? I think the idea is pretty nice, I like some of the
characters like Chris (one of the pixie hunters) and some parts are pretty well
written, but the story is missing a bit of a logic flow. A simple A happens and
so B is the outcome kind of red thread through the story. Right now it feels
like the story is built out of a bunch of unconnected lumps that randomly
happen one after another. There really is a bit of a lack of stability: the red
thread. One cause is probably the lack of a sufficient explanation about the
pixie-affair at the start of the story. ‘Cause why is it that the pixies killed
Adelynn’s mother? Why do they bother killing humans in general? What is their
goal? What’s with the necklace Adelynn got from her mum? Instead of answering
these questions, the story seems to have gotten sidetracked to Adelynn’s love
life and potential bachelors, which didn’t seem to be the intention of the
story at the start. At the end of the fifth episode, however, it seems to be
getting back on track again, but since it ends there and the sixth episode isn’t
out yet, I won’t know if the answers will come after this.
On the
directing part, all seems well, except for this one scene during the final test
before Adelynn becomes an official pixie huntress. Here there is a bit of a
mess up with the layering, which isn’t too uncommon when staging a lot of
characters in a single scene, but it is something that needs to be fixed.
Do you
like a good action filled drama with an original theme like this one? Please
support the author by reading her story!
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